"The light is fading..."
"Don't worry, we'll find him."
"But what if he's hurt? Or lost?"
"Don't even think it. Kevin's a smart boy, I'm sure he's fine."
"I hope you're right..."
"Keeeeeeeevviiiiiiiinnnnnnn...!"
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This was written for the Trifextra Challenge for this weekend :)
It's the other side of the story from the previous entry, He Did.
For the weekend prompt we're asking for exactly 33 words of dialogue.
Ohh,this is so scary for any parent !Loved the way you weaved hope in the dialogue-hope the Dad's(?)confidence in Kevin's smartness proves right & they find him,safe & sound.This is fabulous, Dawn & it won't surprise me at all if you place this time:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much! :)
Deleteyour dialogue was perfect - brought me right into the moment
ReplyDeleteThat's awesome - thank you!
DeleteOh God... I know the lost kid feeling. You really captured it - well done!
ReplyDeleteI like this continuation, but I hope they find each other again!
ReplyDeleteThank you - only time will tell! If they do, they'll have found something else, too
Deleteit's that moment just before the finding - when all hope is (seems to be) lost . . . THAT moment that kills the parent. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteI PROMISE - I am not a robot.
Yeah...I'm happy you picked up on the desperation vibe in the ...! I put in there. Thank you :)
DeleteOh? Is the Prove Your Not a Bot thing over the top ? I'll check it out, see if I can lower the security level :) It's at default, whatever that is.
There, no more word verification required :)
DeleteMy heart is frozen in the hopes that they find him... I really hope they do.
ReplyDeleteMe too... :}
ReplyDeleteA horrible thing to go through. Very real.
ReplyDeleteWow - well done in just 33 words! Love the way you've told the story from both sides.
ReplyDeleteThe lost child is the worst feeling....my desperation turns to panic pretty quickly. (It's happened a couple times and boy do I get mad when they wander back to me with a 'geez, you're so uptight' attitude!)
ReplyDeleteI hope Kevin wanders back and they get to hug away the fright and anger.
How scared they must be!
ReplyDeletegreat dialouge
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written. 33 words are a bit hard for me. This is fantastic!
ReplyDeleteJust the right amount of anxiety tempered with reassurance. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHow terrifying!
ReplyDeleteUgh. Every mama's worst nightmare.
ReplyDeleteOh man, Dawn... That was a chilling dialog. In fact it was a jolt... my 3year daughter was lost on Stinson Beach once for hours. This brought that all back. Well done.
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